Duffy

Username: jaszthewayyoulikeit

What was liked about your story:

I love the unique names of the MC, Yzavel, and her mate Storm.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I didn't like that there wasn't much description in regards to characters, as well as lack of description such as a dress and the cake within he first three chapters. Those are areas where readers could really connect with the story, because they feel they can see in their mind's eye what they believe the character(s) to be seeing/hearing/tasting, etc.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

The plot so far makes sense to me, so I don't have commentary on it negatively.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Again, I feel like the chapters could do with more description.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Some scenes were not so clear to me, but others were. For the ones that were, the author made sure to inform the readers where the action was.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

The scenes felt realistic and the characters each seem to have their own personality, which I find is always great to have in a story.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

I don't feel like the senses were appealed to much, so the author could consider adding more of what exactly the characters are seeing, physically feeling, tasting, smelling, etc.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

They were introduced to the reader in a way that made it obvious they were important to the MC

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

For the most part yes, but Yzavel's brothers felt a little too similar in personality.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Not yet

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

The dialogue that was there felt important to move the story along.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes, it did

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

There was one moment that I felt the dialogue was foreshadowing, because I as a reader knew that Yzavel would meet her mate and be taken from her brothers' protective shadow.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Just the description where it was lacking.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

The chapters were pleasantly easy to read

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

9.5

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

8

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

Yes! It seems like there is a very good plot in store and I'm excited to find out more.

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Username: xabishhrraquelx

What was liked about your story:

Such an underrated read! The story was really interesting and the main character was portrayed and introduced well! This deserves more recognition ❤️

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

Honestly and genuinely none!

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense? Yes, it did! I, however, wanted to know why she was hated by her so-called parents. It wasn’t stated yet on the first three chapters, but I guess that’s alright since my book is also slow burn.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

It was eventful in the sense that the story started with Aurah (the female MC) being tortured/punished for eloping an event. That was a strong start, and I’m honestly here for it.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

I did. She described where the character was at all times.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

It did.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

I felt the raw emotion of her hatred and bitterness towards her parents. The author did great with conveying what he/she wanted the book’s readers to feel.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Well, for one, she was about to be mated to the crown prince of werewolves. Another was that her parents were total jerks.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes, they all had different personalities.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Not yet. The protagonist was clear though—the female MC

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

Some were fillers, but I feel like they were also necessary in a way.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yes

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

No, this was why I loved the story. I’m pretty nit-picky in terms of the technical aspects of a book.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? Easy to read. Although, as previously mentioned, I didn’t know why she was hated by her parents yet, since I just read the required first three chapters.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

10

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

9

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

Yes, definitely. It was a well-written book, even when its still on its genesis phase.

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Username: Lily_246

What was liked about your story:

I liked that this was a story that included different types of supernaturals.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

There are only 3 chapters so far so its hard to have a feel for the story yet. we're just getting introduced to the characters and we don't know anything about the main conflict of the story. My biggest problem with the story is that our werewolf is over 500 years old and sounds like she's 14. She has zero awareness of the world that she lives in or the people around her. There is nothing to tell you in these first chapters that she has 500 years of experience of anything. Even a werewolf who has lived in seclusion all those years would at least have self awareness of themselves. I did leave messages where gaps in information existed and the author updated those sections so they read better. However, these are things to keep in mind moving forward with the story.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

As there are only 3 chapters so far we don't know what the plot is yet.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

There is almost too much information. The author gives an information page before you start reading, but the main character doesn't really act like she knows all the information that the reader possesses. If the author is going to keep her characters clueless, then so should the reader. the characters should tell this information not the first page.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes, the author does a good job letting you know exactly where you are.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

I didn't only because there were alot of gaps that were pulling me out of the story and the author is still trying to figure out what her story even is.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

There was a self awareness gap in the characters that the author has been improving on as I mentioned where gaps existed. I would like to see if this improves as more chapters post.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

the main character did.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes, so far the characters felt like their own people.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

well, so far the first 3 chapters deal with our girl finding her jerk of a mate.

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

I didn't feel like the dialogue was unnecessary.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes, it was easy to follow.

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Not really. You get most information from the characters thoughts.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

mistakes made were pointed out in the story itself.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

Its an easy read grammar wise.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes

Your punctuation rated between 1-10? 8

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

7

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

6

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

Recommendation:

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Username: WendilynnKerezman

What was liked about your story:

I liked how it incorporated modern music culture into a lasting fandom and I think it adds a lot of diversity into the book and makes it it's own thing.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I didn't like how when the POV changed, it wasn't specified when it changed from the band to Julie. Also how some of the sentences where really short in some paragraphs. The whole paragraph consisted solely of really short sentences and it took away the flow of the story.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Yes, the plot makes sense and I don't feel as if it needs any improvement.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

The chapters where balanced. Some where more of fillers while others where full of things happening so it added a lot diversity. Many things where very descriptive and so it was easy to visualize.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

I knew where the scenes where taking place because the author provided enough description but in the chapter 'Don't lose Control', the scene takes place in the back room, backstage. No description is provided about the setting.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life? Yes. The amount of description helped with it as well as the dialogue.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

The hearing could have been used more when the protagonist went into the stadium to go to the concert. The sense of touch also isn't used. Other than that, most of the senses where used such as eyesight to describe the setting, smell to describe the sents of other wolves and a lot more.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

N/A

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

I couldn't really distinguish Stacy and Julie in the first few chapters since they aren't described as much, and since the POV kept changing.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes. The protagonist is Julie, and the antagonist is Michelle.

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

Some of the dialogue was confusing to read because the sentences weren't woven together in some spots but it was rare, and only happened in the first few chapters. Other than that, the dialogue was necessary to give insight about the story.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

The dialogue was more to give info about the present, and some of the 'dialogue' was thoughts so it incorporated a lot of personal feelings. The dialogue didn't really provide foreshadow.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

No. Everything was clear.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

It depends. As I mentioned earlier, in the first few chapters the sentences where really short. Nothing else. The chapters where relatively easy to read when it comes to structure. Only some parts where hard to read because of the sentence arrangement.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? There was enough punctuation and it was used correctly.

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

9.5

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

9.5

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

8.5

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

Yes. It has opened my eyes to the K-Pop community, writers and music. I was never interested in K-Pop as it was not my preferred genera to read or listen too. I feel like reading 'My Mate is an Idol' has helped me with expanding what I read and my preferences.