Tracy

Username: azenethcardiel

What was liked about your story:

I like the starting of the book, instead of having a generic start its more of something that I haven't read before.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

There are a lot of grammatical errors, specially in subject verb agreement and spelling errors that make it difficult to read and comprehend. Also that there isn't any proper paragraphing and it lessens your feeling of reading a book.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

The plot does makes sense and it has a clear backstory as well.I like the way it is developing.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?Mostly yes.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes mostly, the author tells us through the POV of the characters where they are and what they are doing.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

Though there were grammatical errors once you start reading the story and get hold of it you can easily feel yourself present in the scenes looking at them taking place right in front of you.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

Yes, in the first chapter itself when the author explains the disorder through the chapter's POV it was made sure that all senses were explained and you could actually feel them through the writing. Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Mostly

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes, though it takes time to get hold of the sisters but eventually one realises

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Protagonist yes, not sure pf the antagonist so far.

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?Yes most of them were

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Maybe because at times as the story proceeds you feel the author is just rushing through them.

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yup, they told us about everything each character felt as well as the situation they were in.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Mostly grammatical errors, spelling errors and no paragraphing

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

The errors made the chapters time taking to read but not necessarily hard

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

No, as stated there was hardly any paragraphing and it made you feel that you were reading a single paragraph for the whole story

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

5

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

6

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

5

Your Partner's Personal Critique

:I think almost everything was covered except I have a suggestion that the pace in the story should be decreased to give a bit more of insight.

Recommendation:

Its a maybe because of the pace because though the chapters are beautifully written, somewhere in the middle of the second chapter you feel that the author has suddenly pressed the accelerator and is rushing with the backstory.

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Username: eleenabanerjee

What was liked about your story:

I like how there's some mystery in the beginning of the story.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I think this story is good

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Yes the plot made sense

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Yes they were full of information and a very interesting storyline

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes, the author gave a lot of info and was very descriptive

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

Yes

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

They were added in there

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

They felt important by the way they were described

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

It was necessary

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yes it did

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

A few grammar errors

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

They were easy to follow

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

10

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

7

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

10

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

This story is very different than the ones I read. You don't know what you're going to expect and I like that.

Recommendation:

Yes I would because it's a good story.

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Username: Lit-on-fire

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Username: Lil-wolf23

Unfortunately, your partner failed to do this week's assignment and they've received a strike for the tardiness. If you'd still wish to get a review done, please contact the founder and she or one of the admins will do it in place of your partner or you could choose to trust your new pair will write one for this week. We're so sorry for the inconvenience.