Kelly

Username: gg0105

What was liked about your story:

Some certain parts were very detailed and vivid.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

A few words are typos that kind of make the sentence not make sense, but I can usually figure it out.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

It does make sense.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

The chapters are pretty eventful and most of the chapters contain more information.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes. They said where the main characters were.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

It's very realistic and describes everything.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

Sight and hearing were used. Smell and touch was also kind of described too. Taste wasn't used, so I guess they could describe the taste of the food they eat? I don't really know.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

The two main characters are in almost every chapter.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

I think it was necessary to show what kind of character the characters were.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yes

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

There weren't a lot of mistakes. There's only a few typos and dialogue punctuation mistakes. Sometimes the three "your" are mixed up.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

The chapters were pretty easy to read.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

The dialogue punctuation is missing a few punctuation marks sometimes.

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

9

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

9

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

7

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

I think I covered everything

Recommendation:

I would recommend it to the people who like sweet cliche stories that kind of make you rage at the bad guys and say, "Awwwwwwww," at the sweet parts.

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Username: WERECAT_kittY

What was liked about your story:

I really enjoyed how unique it was. I haven't read one like it before and am very intrigued in it.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I really liked everything.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense? Makes sense

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

The author was able to put in enough information to keep the reader entertained.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes I did. The author would usually state it in the text.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

I did. During a specific part (Mating Games) I thought it was really intriguing how she fought the rouges.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

They were all

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

I think the characters felt important by having their own spotlight and being able to talk about themselves.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

I could because the author specifically put the point of views.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yep

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

It was great

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yep

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Not personally

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Not really

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? Easy

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

10

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

10

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

I would defiantly! Especially to some friends. It's a very unique story and I loved being able to read it.

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Username: BexyCL

What was liked about your story:

I liked how she managed to keep the readers in suspense with a certain something that everyone wants to know about.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

Theres nothing

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

The plot is brilliant

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

N/A

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

yes, she did so with a very thorough description of the scene and how they got there

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

they felt very realistic with how everything was described

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

N/A

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

each character had at least one person that truly cared for them

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

there was a clear antagonist but not really protagonist but i think that made the plot better

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

the dialogue helped a lot

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

through the dialogue, you learn how the character feels because they are talking about it with someone

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

No

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

They were easy

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes and yes

Your punctuation rated between 1-10? 9

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

9

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

yes. It's different from other books of the same genre and has a different story line unlike some that go with the same story line from the books they've read before

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Username: gingerscorpion1

What was liked about your story:

What I liked about this story was the new idea of it. Also the fact that it's her first story, I see a lot of potential!

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

It's not that I didn't like it, but I do have some advice. I feel like it was moving too fast and it felt like they were telling more instead of showing.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

I'm not sure if I know the plot since the story just started and is still on going. With the information that's been provided so far, I can't say much until I get more context.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

The chapters were definitely eventful and held information in them. But it'd be nice if more information and details were included.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

I was aware of where the scenes were taking place. However, it did take me a bit too realize I was somewhere new. But when the scene became clear, the author did a good job in describing the setting.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life? The scenes were coming to life, and started too. But once again, it was moving a little to fast to really allow the scene to come alive alive.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

All the senses were used in this story, but could be included more. I recommend allowing the characters explain them and really feel them.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

The characters did feel important considering they were naturally of high ranks. So you got the idea of them being important right away considering they stood out from your average wolves.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes I was able to distinguish the difference between the characters.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

The protagonist is definitely known. As for the antagonist, I think I might know who it is but once again, the story it's still being brought up and on going. I'd like to see what she makes of them!

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

I believe that it "lacked" dialogue. I just feel like the characters needed to speak more in order to under them more. I'd like to know them more and be able to connect with them by their words.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes and no. The dialogue did feel and seem realistic which was good. But, it was hard to follow at times since there wasn't much.

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

I could say that some of the dialogue was stirring up some feelings, but I would love more of it.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Yes, there was a lot errors and mistakes in this story. Lot's of typos for example instead of using "I" capitalized, it's a lower case"i."

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

The chapters were easy to read which is very conveniently. I really liked this about her story!

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? There was punctuation as much as there wasn't much of it. Some periods and commas were missing.

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

4

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

4

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

6

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

I believe as a young writer who's barely starting, you have a long way to go. Now's the time to embrace this opportunity of being part of this club and seek help from you partners and mentors. Remember that all feedback is GOOD feedback. It's tough but having the right people to guide you, I believe your story will take off. "M Is For Mate," has potential and I can't wait to see what you do with it!

Recommendation:

Yes I'd like to recommend this story to other readers. The story is still testing the waters but has so much potential and I really recommend all of you guys to stop by and help our new author, show her some love. The story is filled with love and I really enjoy that. It's new and I like how the couple met.