Joanne

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WERECAT_kittY

What was liked about your story:

What I liked about this story is that it's different than the other ones. It has humor and a lot of different things. Like the MC has a lot of unique characteristics that I haven't seen in other stories so I think that's very interesting.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I wouldn't change anything, the author is doing an amazing job.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

The plot does make sense and it's going good so far.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Yes, there was always something going on and the chapters were filled with information.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes the author did a great job in describing everything very good.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

Yes because the author would go into detail in how everything was happening. Like when the MC was in a fighting scene she would explain how her powers worked and how they looked. I thought that was very helpful because you can see it in your head while reading through it.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

She used the five senses in how people could see her powers, and in taste the MC loves bacon. In hearing it would be when she hears rogues approach her, so yes the author did involve the senses.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

The characters felt important because they were mentioned in every chapter. You can also tell they're important because they have unique powers.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes I can tell the difference between the characters.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

The dialogue was necessary and important.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes everything made sense.

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yes it did.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

They were easy to read, and everything was structured perfectly.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes there was enough punctuation and it was used correctly.

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Your Partner's Personal Critique:

The author is doing an amazing job in the story, there's a lot of humor and a lot of amazing things I've never read in a story. I like that the MC is strong and has powers to defend herself.

Recommendation:

I would recommend this story to others, especially if they like humor. This story is very different from other stories and that's good. The author makes everything great too.

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azenethcardial

What was liked about your story:

It's pretty realistic.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

It only happened once, but there was a part where I didn't know who was hugging the main character so I had to guess.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Yes it does

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Some scenes were described very vividly

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes I did. The author said where they were and included pictures

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

The scenes were described well and it was realistic

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

Some characters are in almost every chapter

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Some characters are in almost every chapter

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

I could because each name is different and they're stated clearly.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Not yet

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

I think it was necessary

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

It was realistic and easy to follow.

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yes.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Not really

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

Some chapters are sort of long but it's still easy to read.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Some mistakes are made, for example, "(insert quote here)",

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Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

I would recommend it because it's pretty unique and not cliche.

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Soulmeraki

What was liked about your story:

I really enjoyed how she changed up the mating process and put emotion other than straight lust and desire into it. As much as I enjoy the "primal" claiming process, this was refreshing.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I don't think that with a third person perspective there is a need to call out when a section is about a character. A gentle lead in to them and then keep rocking it! (that way viewers don't get whiplash with a sudden change). This was only really present early in the book. Honestly, I totally enjoyed the book and look forward to reading the rest!

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

I feel like for the chapters I've read, there is a lot of juicy stuff left to come! The plot made complete sense and has me guessing at a few things already. I have a little confusion around the Cassie "mate" scenes- I am not sure why they wanted our main girl and if they were waiting for her or if the "waiting" was for Cassie. But then again, the story isn't finished. Lots of pieces are coming together at this point in the book.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

There was wonderful steady progress in both relationships and character as well as plot. I know one chapter was called out as "filler" but sometimes the story is between the lines and in the details. All chapters felt relevant to this point in the story.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes. The author did a really nice job of leading into new places. I especially liked the "teleportation" to the elders- the description of the surroundings and back again as well as the "chase" scene with Cassie was well done. Use of internal thoughts and observations is nicely done.

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

I really like the mix of descriptive narrative mixed with peppered adjectives and strong verb choices. Not too much of anything- well balanced which kept me engaged.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

As above, I think the story is well balanced in description.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

There are a group of main characters and I love how they round out the group nicely. They work well together and the way the story is progressing, I am very invested in all of them. Well done.

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes. They are all distinct in their personalities and are written in both good and bad lights allowing us to see their fallibility.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

There is a rogue element, a "snitch" and the elder group- so I think there are many things to resolve at this point. How they are related is unclear but yes. Good guys and bad guys and one probably bad good guy? Just have to wait to see!

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

Dialogue moved the story along nicely. It was broken up with longer paragraphs which flowed well.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

I am not a master at punctuation and dialogue formatting so take this with a grain of salt- I think that some of the dialogue paragraphs are a bit too long- so that the dialogue sentences get mixed in a bit. The dialogue itself is well punctuated so easy to see but I think it could be broken up a bit more. (something for me to look into too!)

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

There is a nice combination of internal narrative and spoken narrative. Both give good insight into the characters and their own challenges/skills.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

No! There are some occasional missing words that can easily be implied, but a solid edit for errors would catch the little things. Early on and scattered throughout, there are some incomplete sentences- but they feel like they are more for accentuation than for actual sentences.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

Very easy to read. Other than the dialogue sentence break out, well spaced, well paragraphed.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Punctuation was great!

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Your Partner's Personal Critique:

This is a fun and different sort of book. I would call it a slow burn with steady progress. At this point, there are many mysteries waiting for resolution. The author uses a really nice mix of sentence structure and I found very few, if any, repetitions in word choices or sentence creation. Made for a nice read. The characters have steadily grown on me and it's really refreshing to have an intelligent, non-pushy Alpha male. I appreciate that this author seems to be shying away from the usual cliche's and is creating a really great universe for her story to take place. I look forward to reading the rest!

Recommendation:

Yes! Especially when it is complete! Keep going @soulmeracki!!!

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angstyjane

What was liked about your story:

This story is incredible! I can't remember the last time I read something so well-written! The characters are beautifully fleshed out and seem very realistic. I'm already rooting for the couple! I love this book so much!

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on):

I think the story could use some more description in certain places. I'd also like to hear Jae's thoughts more. And how he transitions from a playboy to a lover, because right now, he is an enigma.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

I love both of the characters. It's a slow burn so I'll hold off judgement.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Yes! Each chapter is packed and none of them feel like fillers. It is wonderfully written.

Setting

Did your reader know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes

Vivid Description

Were your scenes coming to life?

Yes, honestly its written so nicely and transitions quite seamlessly. It also doesn't feel like the story revolves only around Jae, as Anne has her own personal life as well. Makes the character more real and definitely makes the story more lifelike.

If and how all five senses were appealed to:

Visual description is most often used. The other senses, not so much. Smell is used only to describe Anne's scent and not a lot more

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

They're all well fleshed-out and have their own characteristics. Even supporting characters like Nicole seem to have a bigger purpose and are not restricted only to revolve around the main couple. The author also seamlessly weaves in little detail about various characters (such as Jessica not being the jealous type).

Could your reader distinguish the difference between the characters?

Yes! They're thoroughly developed.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Seems so.

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if you were just trying to fill up the page?

Dialogue didn't seem unnecessary anywhere.

Was the dialogue realistic and easy to follow?

Yes

Did the dialogue give the reader any insight to anything in the story?

Yes, for sure!

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes?

Not really.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read?

Yes

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly?

Yes

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Your grammar rated between 1-10?

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Your Partner's Personal Critique:

The story is so beautiful I'm honestly floored. Well done! I'm definitely going to be hooked to it. Can't wait to read more.

Recommendation:

Yes, FOR SURE. This is going to be my #1 werewolf recomendation.