Joanne (JoanneProcter)

Username: azenethcardiel

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Username: 70489AYCB

What was liked about your story: I think this story is very interesting, it's not like your typical wolf story. I like how it's very descriptive, all those details are important.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on): At first it was a little confusing, but as I kept reading I got it.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Yes

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Yes

Setting

Did you know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes

Vivid Description

Did you feel as if the scene was coming to life? A little bit

Were the five senses involved? If yes, how?

Yes, because everything was so descriptive and written nicely.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Yes

Could you distinguish the difference between the characters? If no, why not? Yes I could tell the difference

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if they were just trying to fill up the page?

It was necessary, and it made sense

Was the dialogue easy to follow? If no, why?

Yes

Did the dialogue give you any insight to anything in the story? (i.e: thoughts, personal feelings, foreshadowing)

Yes

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes? If yes, please specify your answer.

Not really, just like a missing word in between but other than that it was good.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? If hard, please specify your answer.

They were easy to read

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? If no, please specify your answer.

Yes everything was good

Were there words used in the incorrect context? If yes, please elaborate to the best of your ability.

No

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

10

Your grammar rated between 1-10? 9

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

10

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

N/A

Recommendation:

I would if they like mystery, or crime solving if that makes sense. It's full of mystery and it's not a cliché.