Shannon (Rieka914)

Username: WendilynnKerezman (My Mate Is An Idol)

What was liked about your story: It was fun idea that was well explored by someone who certainly seems to love both werewolves and kpop! It is a wonderful pairing. All in all, it was a great read, not too heavy- perfect for summer and well resolved to lead into a second story as was eluded. (but not cliff hanging.) I want more but don't feel annoyed, if you know what I mean! The main couple was super sweet and the book had just enough skinship to satisfy any audience. Glad I got to read it! I have been eyeing it for a while!

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Totally

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

They were the perfect length.

Setting

Did you know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Yes.

Vivid Description

Did you feel as if the scene was coming to life?

Yes. The rescue scene was particularly well done.

Were the five senses involved? If yes, how?

Yes. Great job describing features without going overboard, felt the sense of excitement throughout, felt fear, felt love/desire.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Yes. They sucked me into their story nicely.

Could you distinguish the difference between the characters? If no, why not?

Yes. I got a little confused with the band members initially because a bunch were introduced at once but that worked out by the end

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes.

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if they were just trying to fill up the page?

Necessary and well done.

Was the dialogue easy to follow? If no, why?

Yes. Punctuated and separated nicely.

Did the dialogue give you any insight to anything in the story? (i.e: thoughts, personal feelings, foreshadowing)

Yes- gave nice interpersonal relationship info as well as personality.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes? If yes, please specify your answer.

No. A few typos but nothing blaring.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? If hard, please specify your answer.

Really easy. Very well done.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? If no, please specify your answer.

Really well done.

Were there words used in the incorrect context? If yes, please elaborate to the best of your ability.

Nope!

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

10

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

10

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

It started as a sweet story that morphed naturally into more. I could feel the change but it felt totally natural and not out of place at all. The main conflicts of the mate bond and the ability to reject separate from your wolf was well explained and a nice different twist on a common trope. The main bad guys- Michelle and Nathan- could have had a bit more backstory early on- Nathans jump from sweet bff to psycho in a day was hard to believe at first. The story flushed it out well with a rant toward the end but a few tid bits more at the beginning to hint at his setting in psychosis might be a nice nugget. Michelle- I felt like the slut shaming was that- I wasn't quite sure of it's truth (even throughout the book)- and maybe it was meant to be that way. Just felt a tad harsh and out of place from the otherwise sweet main girl. The band members were well flushed out as were the girls. I enjoyed the use of some Korean but wonder if you should put the actual Korean paired with romanized versions. I have seen the romanized only mocked in some other books. The kpop concepts were also well placed and used well. I could totally tell you are a fan! You could consider explaining quickly the meaning of things like "netizen" and "saesang" and "maknae" as well as hyung. Even the concept of her becoming their sister. They are all cool and uniquely cultural. I happen to know them but others may not.

Recommendation:

Totally! Nice reader friendly read- sweet romance, fun genre, unique concept.

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Username: Angstyjane (Magnetic Love)

What was liked about your story: I liked the mystery of discovering what supernatural the character Anne was.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on): The male lead was a major dense bonehead. lol Its always frustrating when a character just jumps to conclusions he'd never have if he's JUST OPEN HIS MOUTH AND ASK! lol. But then, what would we have if characters were logical and rational all the time? what fun is that? lol

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Yes. The plot is pretty straight forward.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

The plot is slow moving, but there is enough intrigue to keep the reader wondering. There could be more clues added so that you see the characters noticing the different clues to what type of supernaturals they have around them. The side characters spend a lot of time wondering about the clues Anne's behavior tells them, but you never see Anne also wondering about the people about her. Then she mentions later that she observed them and so knew something was up, but the reader never saw her notice anything supernatural.

Setting

Did you know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Mostly. I've already left notes in the chapters were it was ambiguous.

Vivid Description

Did you feel as if the scene was coming to life? I got emotionally involved in various scenes with different characters. Nicole needs to go away, David better not be a traitor and Derrick needs to be pushed off a cliff.

Were the five senses involved? If yes, how?

You know, I don't really pay attention to the five senses. So I can't say but I know there was a lot of descriptions about the environments that were sometimes a little too wordy for me. But that is just my preferences, I don't really care if they can smell unless its their mates scent. lol

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Jae was hard to like, but I liked Anne right away.

Could you distinguish the difference between the characters? If no, why not? Yes. The characters stood out as individuals.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Oh yeah. There are at least two I won't mourn if they ended up dead. Just saying.

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if they were just trying to fill up the page?

The dialogue was very good. It was never pointless.

Was the dialogue easy to follow? If no, why?

Yes.

Did the dialogue give you any insight to anything in the story? (i.e: thoughts, personal feelings, foreshadowing)

Yes. She did very well in conveying how the characters were feeling as they talked.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes? If yes, please specify your answer.

Yes. She did very well in conveying how the characters were feeling as they talked.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? If hard, please specify your answer.

The story is a slow burn romance and so it does take its time, but its an easy read.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? If no, please specify your answer.

I didn't notice anything out of place.

Were there words used in the incorrect context? If yes, please elaborate to the best of your ability.

"I'm on nine clouds" is totally going to be a phrase I'm going to use from now on. so funny. The character who is using the wrong idioms uses them to brilliant effect. laughed every time.

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

I'm not a grammar nazi so I"m going to give her a 9 just because nothing stood out to me.

Your grammar rated between 1-10? 9

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

9

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

Except for the few areas were character action wasn't clear, and notations were made in those spots, the rest of the story was engaging and fun. I'll be reading the rest of the chapters eagerly as they are posted. I really liked that this story wasn't explicit. So many werewolf stories feel like an excuse to create porn and the story is nothing more than a set up to the sex scene. This is a warm story, filled with enough intrigue to keep the reader's attention without dropping a bunch of sex all over them. There's intimacy without it being trashy or misplaced.

Recommendation:

Yes, I would. I would recommend that the author put a note that it is a slow burn romance so the reader knows to be patient as the story unfolds. many werewolf stories are very hot burn stories and if the reader has gotten into the groove, they might not give this good story a chance if they don't get a little warning to be patient.