Joanne (JoanneProcter)

Username: angstyjane (Magnetic Love)

What was liked about your story: You mean what I love? Because God knows how over the moon this story has me! Like a girl is super excited y'all.

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on): Well... the mean girl, but then again who likes them?

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

Oh honey yes, it's very suspenseful if you will. I'm trying to figure everything out, but the story is so good that it's pushing me through it.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Her chapters are full of information and events that it has my heart racing while I scream with excite meant! The chapters only keep getting better by the minute.

Setting

Did you know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

This girl is excellent at letting us her readers know where we are exactly. It's very refreshing and I love it.

Vivid Description

Did you feel as if the scene was coming to life?

If I'm honest, I almost feel like I'm present. It's so vivid that I have to stop and collect myself because I wish I could be in such wondrous place! She really captures you with each scene and I love it!

Were the five senses involved? If yes, how?

The senses are always involved one way in another. Just goes back to show how vivid a scene can be when it's explained and structured well.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Every character has its place and I love it. I just have to mention that you'll fall in love too quickly with the stud, I sure wasn't ready for how important he quickly became the most important besides the sweet blue.

Could you distinguish the difference between the characters? If no, why not?

Characters in this story each have their own gift, beauty, and style. They're unique and fun making them easily stand out.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes ma'am, the protagonist is quick to me signaled out and as for the antagonist, I think I have a good clue of who it is...

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if they were just trying to fill up the page?

Nope, all dialogue was necessary and helped carry each scene smoothly. It gives us the readers an opportunity to fall in love with each character.

Was the dialogue easy to follow? If no, why?

Most definitely, the dialogue is easy to follow. It's set up well and has purpose!

Did the dialogue give you any insight to anything in the story? (i.e: thoughts, personal feelings, foreshadowing)

The author really knows how to speak to a girls soul. I can sense a few things, but oh my, this girl really out here throwing curve balls like a freeze-be. I love it over all and it gives my heart a good race.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes? If yes, please specify your answer.

Hardly spotted any, maybe a word or two, but overall excellent writer, genuinely enjoy her work!

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? If hard, please specify your answer.

The chapters weren't difficult, they're great and overall very much readable.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? If no, please specify your answer.

Of course, punctuation was present and seemed good, nothing too out of place.

Were there words used in the incorrect context? If yes, please elaborate to the best of your ability.

Nope, all the words were used correctly except for Nova, clearly needs a little help. But then again, it's part of her loving character. But besides that, everything is used correctly.

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

Punctuation is a great 10.

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

Amazing grammar, not to difficult. 10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

10, her vocabulary is amazingly used.

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

I don't have a critique, I feel like this author knows what she's doing and I genuinely enjoy her work.

Recommendation:

Most definitely! Guys, please check her out, she deserves so much recognition for her work it's just mind-blowing how good she is. The moment I started reading, I couldn't stop. The story really captures you and persuades you into continue reading it. It's well written! This has to be one of my new favorites! This story is definitely different and unique!

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Username: BexyCL (The Chosen One)

What was liked about your story: The story is a nice change up to the idea of a prophesy and mate. I think some major plot twists are coming and I look forward to seeing what they are. (nice use of foreshadowing.)

What wasn't liked about it (something you could work on): Other than I think my sweetie might not make it, no. I was a tad confused how the prologue fit in when I opened up the first chapter, but by the end of the first chapter it made sense.

Plot Cohesion

Does the plot make sense?

It does! It's ongoing so I think there is a lot left to reveal. The premise of a mate or mates, the concept of a prophesy, the idea that the inner wolf is a bit biased.

Were the chapters eventful and full of information?

Yes. Bit by bit information is trickled in in terms of plot and character development.

Setting

Did you know where the scenes were taking place at all times?

Pretty much. There were a couple of quick shifts in terms of scene and I had to re-read but that may have been more my error than the authors.

Vivid Description

Did you feel as if the scene was coming to life?

Yes. I really like the introduction of the "Clyde" character.

Were the five senses involved? If yes, how?

I haven't honestly been engaged through the senses but don't necessarily feel they are missing. I can think of places where all 5 were used- snapping twigs, minty breath, that sweet scent of a mate.

Characters

Did the characters feel important?

Yes. There is a lot of tension building between several characters and they are all an integral part of the plot.

Could you distinguish the difference between the characters? If no, why not?

Yes. I think the hardest one was the "voice" of the main character's "wolf." BexyCL did a really nice job of explaining the intricacies there.

Was there a clear antagonist and protagonist?

Yes. In this case the protagonist is not necessarily a person at this point and is actually the prophesy itself which is interesting! I hate the dang prophesy! (so well done BexyCL!)

Dialogue

Was all of the dialogue necessary, or did it seem as if they were just trying to fill up the page?

Definitely not unnecessary. I wish Jackson would talk more! But that's his character.

Was the dialogue easy to follow? If no, why?

On the whole, yes. It would occasionally get buried with the paragraphs visually but was still properly punctuated.

Did the dialogue give you any insight to anything in the story? (i.e: thoughts, personal feelings, foreshadowing)

Totally foreshadowing! Lots of main character thoughts. Again, Jackson's are sort of absent but it fit with his character so they weren't missed and added to his and the prophesy's mystery.

Grammar & Organization

Were there a lot of errors/mistakes? If yes, please specify your answer.

There are fairly regular mistakes but I am a bit of a grammar freak. I think many of them come from autocorrect from typing on a phone.

Were the chapters hard, or easy to read? If hard, please specify your answer.

Nicely easy read. Nice change up in sentence formation regularly. Not a lot of repeated word use or over use of adverbs to substitute for description.

Was there enough punctuation, and was it used correctly? If no, please specify your answer.

Yes. Punctuation is well done on the whole.

Were there words used in the incorrect context? If yes, please elaborate to the best of your ability.

Again, I think auto-correct was the biggest issue here. Some use of "dad" vs "Dad" in early chapters.

Your punctuation rated between 1-10?

10. A quick edit with someone who knows how to look for errors would catch them quickly.

Your grammar rated between 1-10?

10

Your vocabulary rated between 1-10?

10. Vocabulary fit the story well.

Your Partner's Personal Critique:

This story is ongoing and so far highly engaging. I have actually seen her writing skills improve over the course of the book. The plot is a nice change up from the usual prophesy/mate sort of cliches and the introduction of a seemingly sexy vampire is greatly appreciated by me. I am looking forward to where the rest of the book will take me. You know a book is engaging when you wait for an update. BexyCL- keep your enthusiasm, keep your excitement and finish strong. I will be waiting!

Recommendation:

Totally. It's a sweet romance (so far) with what promises to have some nice plot twists. (sorry, spoiler). The characters are realistic- vulnerable, keeping secrets and grudges, sweet and romantic. It's not heavy in the romance and is a bit of a slow burn (unlike a lot of werewolf stories) but the romance is a lovely continual underlying factor in what seems to be about half way through the plot.